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So, I was in the tub thinking about how best to progress the story of Carmela and Liina, and I'm starting to wonder if I didn't put enough... Hmm. I'm starting to wonder if I didn't put the cart before the horse again. Carmela's supposed to have the ingrained cynicism, and I'm not sure that really came through. I wanted her close-minded to love, and yet it seems to me she willing lets Liina into her heart. 

When I starting writing, I thought this would make Liina seem more special, but now I'm really questioning whether I went too fast again. Maybe I should have a chapter or two before Liina to reinforce her cynicism and attitude toward relationships? Maybe I should have her acting more standoffish to Liina for a while? 

I'm just feeling really uncertain of my writing right now. I know what I have is great, but I keep thinking, I could make it better. So, what I'm really wondering is, well, what do you think???

At the very least, I'm going to start working on a prologue for Carmela. Definitely did not reinforce her cynicism. 

Please, I could use some feedback!

~Gabby V
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KoU32's avatar
Um, if she was standoffih to liina, i think liina would be have been scared off. If Carmela actted distant or unsure, i could see that. If this helps